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:::I reread it again, and honestly, I don't see how it's too long. It's actually rather concise, considering what it does, how unique the effect is, and how thoroughly the effect needs to be explained given said uniqueness. It doesn't even grapple you; it bull-rushes you into an infinitely tight space, forming a ring of light around your body that holds you completely immobile. (I've written much worse stuff — [[Ukemi (3.5e Feat)|Ukemi]], [[Veles Whirl (3.5e Spell)|Veles Whirl]], and [[Ice Spike (3.5e Spell)|Ice Spike]] come to mind, and heck, I'll admit that [[Somewhere Over The Rainbow (3.5e Maneuver)|Somewhere Over The Rainbow]] ''might'' be a bit longer than it really needs to be.) This really isn't that bad. --[[User:Luigifan18|Luigifan18]] ([[User talk:Luigifan18|talk]]) 06:50, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
::::''"[[Ukemi (3.5e Feat)|Ukemi]], [[Veles Whirl (3.5e Spell)|Veles Whirl]], and [[Ice Spike (3.5e Spell)|Ice Spike]] come to mind, and heck, I'll admit that [[Somewhere Over The Rainbow (3.5e Maneuver)|Somewhere Over The Rainbow]] ''might'' be a bit longer than it really needs to be."''
::::Understatement of the century. Pardon me, I'm finally at Volume 8: Chapter 11: Verse 7, Novel Two. So far I have gleaned "yo this spell holds you in place". I'm sure all these extra words add something else other than that. -- [[User:Eiji-kun|Eiji-kun]] ([[User talk:Eiji-kun|talk]]) 07:00, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
