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More speeling, more grandma
|reason=Sorry, but this spell is just not very workable. Even Eiji's suggested fixes can't make this good, and even then I still struggle to figure out whether this spell is super weak or stupid strong.
When you need immediate crowd control, this spell pales in comparison to, say, ''hold person '' or ''black tentacles'', which can instantly stop a creature from moving or casting spells. On the other hand, if you were to cast this in the fucking Acropolis people will be getting dashed against Doric columns for disintegrate-tier damage left and right, and that's not something a 5th level spell should be capable of doingunder any circumstance.
That alone would have netted it a simple dislike, but on top of that, it comes with the whole Luigi package; a novel's worth of text and filled with obtuse, overcomplicated and unnecessary mechanics.
You don't want to leave any loopholes? If that desire causes this bloated mess of writing, then LET GO OF IT ALREADY. Players will ''always'' find loopholes in spells or situations. Good DMs go into a game expecting it, and it's part of the fun of tabletopping. In the end, everyone is huddled around that table to have some fun, after all. You have a lot of interesting ideas, Luigi, but as it stands your method of substance over style is the very sublimation of unfun-ness.
I'm not going to bother to rate all your spells like this. I don't have a lifetime to devote to reading everything you write. Just... try making some flowcharts for your spells, and see how ridiculous they some of them end up looking.
Change your ways.
