User talk:DraconicMan/Bionic (3.5e Race)

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	Ghostwheel opposes this article and rated it 0 of 4.
	No real flavor, boring mechanics. What is shock flavor? Who knows? How about magnets? How do they work?

	Fluffykittens opposes this article and rated it 0 of 4.
	Congrats on getting formatting down. Now to work on fluff and crunch.

Spanambula dislikes this article and rated it 1 of 4.

So how exactly does magic give a fetus a "small black rod" someplace on their body? Why are they so respected when their only ability is to absorb "shock" damage? Why do you keep making these horrible articles? I know it may feel like we're dog-piling you with bad reviews (and we are; all your stuff is universally bad), but the thing is, we're a community. Seriously, talk to some of us and we'll be more than willing to help shape your ideas into something better, and help you become a better homebrew designer. But if you're not willing to do that, this shit really needs to stop.

Eiji-kun dislikes this article and rated it 1 of 4.

"They appear as human but may have a small black rod someplace on their body." Insert jokes about paladins with a rod up their butt here. It's not as broken as your other stuff, but it's still bad. It is devoid of flavor and information, and they seem to just be humans touched by magic. That can be fine, but how does "magic touched" turn into "electricity healing humans with telepathy"? It's boring, it's dull, and there's danger in absorbing electricity damage (potentially balanced out by its utter lack of features elsewhere, not that this makes a good race). At least it's functional. But you really really (really really) need to learn terminology in D&D. It's electricity, not shock. It's Magical Beast, not Wild Animal. This keeps happening. (EDIT: In fact I was bothered by it, so I made runetouched humans. I don't usually self-shill like this, but you need an example. The idea of magic touched humans can work as seen here. Notice that the fluff actually matches the mechanics.)

	Undead Knave dislikes this article and rated it 1 of 4.
	This really needs more info on both the fluff and the crunch.

	Leziad opposes this article and rated it 0 of 4.
	Barebone of fluff. The luff make no sense, especially not with the stats. Mechanically it garbage, do you mean electricity damage? Because shock damage don't exist.