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::Okay, I fixed the errors that you pointed out. I may have labeled the powers a little off, but that was because I thought the powers are from a source of extraordinary power. I believe I caught most of the grammar errors too. Pleas look again. Please and thank you. Sorry about the “16, part of an indigenous race, home was uprooted by invaders” thing. I was checking spelling on a word document I had already used. - Dukelzan
== Grammar=/=Function ==
'''''"By sacrificing a move action, the Darkblade may cause the shadows around him to harden as if armor. This gives him a bonus to his basic and flat-footed Armor Class. At level 10 it goes up to +2, level 15 it is a +3, and level 20 the bonus is +5. This bonus lasts until the Darkblade decides to use another move action, loses the shadowy illumination, or no longer wishes to power to be active."'''''
I'll use this entry as an example. To fix this requires both updates of the grammar and function. Firstly, one cannot sacrafice a move action (no such function exists). It should say "Activating this ability counts as a standard action". Secondly, there is no such thing as "basic AC". If you want this AC bonus to apply while flat-footed and against touch attacks (which is how I interpretted "basic AC"), it should be a deflection or profane bonus. If it's simply a bonus to AC (with emphasis on retention while flat-footed) it's a plain old enhancement bonus to AC.
'''''"At 5th level, the Darkblade is intuned with shadows enough that he may start casting spells from the shadow domain as if he was a Favoered Soul (see Complete Devine, pages 7 and 8) of 4 levels lower then his Darkblade level. However, the spells can ONLY be from cleric's shadow domain. See [1] page 87 for spells. This power works as if the Darkblade had picked up levels in Favoered Soul."'''''
For starters, Favored Souls can't access the Shadow Domain. Also, are we casting spontaneously as a Favored Soul? Or are we using Wisdom for DCs and Chariams for bonus spells? This entry is horrbily vague. Why not simply add in a spell progression to eliminate confusion?
I can understand that you have a clear(ish) idea of what you want the class to do, you simply lack the knowledge of the game rules and mechanics to put it into proper words. This is fine. You should be asking people to assist you with bringing your class in line with the rules, rather than trying to make up rules to suit your needs as you go. Right now you only want help with grammar and spelling (and honestly, you have no excuse on the spelling), but you need much more help than that.--[[User:Tavis McCricket|Tavis McCricket]] 23:04, August 13, 2010 (UTC)
