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All in all, it's not a terrible first attempt and looks to adhere to the Savage Species sort of way of Wizards of the Coast published material… which we now know as rather skewed and not all that good (I can elaborate on that if you'd like). I'm not going to rate this just yet (gonna give it a few days) but man oh man, you need to make some corrections, playtesting or not. To finish, communicate with us here as much as you can if you need anything or have questions. --[[User:Ganteka Future|Ganteka Future]] ([[User talk:Ganteka Future|talk]]) 00:26, 9 January 2015 (UTC)
TyGah's response:
Hoo boy. What a response to get! So lets tackle it while I'm editing the page... and since I happen to notice it... yes, british spellings. Blame my word processor, and my own being british. I thought it'd caught most of it, but oh well. Now then!
* Semantics - this was because I didn't pay attention when migrating the article from it's place on dandwiki, which doesn't use them, and now I've got to go through and handle that. Oops. I *think* I've done that, but as you say, they're a tricky thing at first. The special stuff is the only bit I haven't tackled just yet; I'll go look at how other pages handle that and tweak it accordingly.
* Wiki Linking... is coming/being done. Mainly because I have to actually remember what's in the SRD and find it all.
* LA and RHD. This is something of a contentious issue in my groups, and I personally don't often agree with LA's widespread dislike. But that aside. They should not have that 10 foot reach, Going 4RHD/0LA shouldn't upset anyone too much, except for one who always insists shapechange is an automatic +1LA. Also means I can (have, probably, if you're reading this after my own edits) make the younger ones 2 and 3 RHD. I'd leave them out, except they're being used.
* Class skills. This is my bad - I so rarely play creatures with RHD I completely forgot about this.
* Land speed changed to 50ft+run was probably something I should have done. And while I'm at it, the natural weapons got a boost too. In a sense the SRD is to blame here since I was working off the light horse and SRD Unicorn, and not fully playing attention.
* SR. Ah, SR, the bane of my life. In campaigns I've seen people (ab)use it to such extents that one campaign very nearly ended coming to blows. The whole reason the SR is done the way it is, is so it scales instead of giving someone who's instantly going to laugh in the face of magic. It's not meant to make them immune, and it grows with them. In the books, they're all but completely immune, except for Adept level magic (Adepts, in D&D terms, being your local wizard who can change the face of the earth). So yes, it's low, but it's by design, and to stop people abusing it.
* Magic horn. And here we have the other side of scaling, where now I see it, I realize where it's needed. Rather than working it by ECL (Which I understand, don't get me wrong) I've linked it to Ability score increases, which make sense. To me, anyway.
* Darkvision. Simply put: because there's no indications in the books that these Unicorns have them. I used Magical Beast because it was what the SRD Unicorn used and there wasn't anything more appropriate, this doesn't mean I agree that all the traits of the Magical Beast type should be there. Of course if I go and re-read the books and find out I'm wrong (or someone else does) I'll quick-fix that.
* Giving them Finesse is largely thematic, and therefore something that probably should be dropped. In the first book at least, Stile and Neysa fence against each other, and her dexterity with her horn is noted, I felt Weapon Finesse was the most appropriate way to show that.
* Shapechanging. OK. Yeah. I see what you did there, and I realize that needs fixing. I think adding the clause '...that possesses HD equal to or less than your ECL, but never higher.' should address that. If there's still other loopholes feel free to throw them at me. I may move the entire details of the shapechange to it's own section, or it's own page later on if it gets too lengthy.
* Favored class is druid because... honestly because I don't have any idea what's more appropriate. Probably Ranger. I've yet to play in a campaign where the multiclassing penalty has been dead and buried, so this is another one I didn't really think much about.
* Younger unicorns - yeah, these will be altered, probably into a racial progression. At the moment they're more a quick-reference (Like I said, they're being used right now).
Where I get time I'll work on finishing updating the semantics for the racial traits and wiki links, though if people want to help me out there it'd be appreciated - especially on the semantics, it's a new thingy for me. Thanks for the feedback, it's much appreciated, and I hope I've done something to address most, if not all, your points! [[User:TyGah|TyGah]] ([[User talk:TyGah|talk]]) 09:44, 9 January 2015 (UTC)
